Friday, July 25, 2008

Would You Kill For Me?

http://www.quizilla.com/stories/7013385/would-you-kill-for-me



By HarleneQuinn

3 comments:

Joel said...

Thanks for posting this, as I ran out of time Friday. I'll be reading it before Monday and I'll share some thoughts. What I read/heard on Friday sounded good.

Cat Lady said...

...and waiting for some more!
Great job.
Maybe on the website, you should but it under different tags baside things like serial and killer, cause if i am right about this story line, and the title is a play on words, it kind of ruins the end.

Joel said...

Life of the barista. I enjoyed the voice of the 1st POV. Question for ya, where do you see this story going? Do you think you'll be developing it into something longer? I like the slice of life aspect, but I'm unsure about the level of development you give to some characters. Why describe Steve so well? Who is the story about, Steve or "that guy"? Why the exposition? How does your main character's lifestyle relate to the story's conclusion? Make those ends meet and I think you have can develop an interesting character through a crux or problem.