Here is what I am going to read at the open mic today:
Dance
Dance your heart out.
Dance from your heart and soul.
Dance in a crowd like no one is watching.
Dance like you've never danced before stretch yourself.
Dance, like its the only thing you've got.
Thursday, August 2, 2007
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7 comments:
'Dance like you've never danced before stretch yourself' sounds a little wonky, but other than that i really agree with what you're saying.
I agree with Emily; that line does sound a bit awkward, but the rest of it is really good. Very deep and clearly from the heart.
Thanks for the advice! I'll have to change it.
Do you think I should lose the 'stretch yourself' part?
Maybe. I think the line sounds a bit better without that.
Thanks!!
YAY hi! i LIKE fromage!
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