Thursday, August 2, 2007

Tell me what you think!!

Here is what I am going to read at the open mic today:
Dance
Dance your heart out.
Dance from your heart and soul.
Dance in a crowd like no one is watching.
Dance like you've never danced before stretch yourself.
Dance, like its the only thing you've got.

7 comments:

Emily said...

'Dance like you've never danced before stretch yourself' sounds a little wonky, but other than that i really agree with what you're saying.

Jen A. said...

I agree with Emily; that line does sound a bit awkward, but the rest of it is really good. Very deep and clearly from the heart.

Wacky Jacky said...

Thanks for the advice! I'll have to change it.

Wacky Jacky said...

Do you think I should lose the 'stretch yourself' part?

Jen A. said...

Maybe. I think the line sounds a bit better without that.

Wacky Jacky said...

Thanks!!

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